Some believe that people today have no interest in maintaining the traditional culture of their country or region. Others believe that it is still important to people that we preserve a traditional way of life. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Across the globe, cultures bring different flavors of
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the world. Some traditional
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point out the family union as
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and part of the region, but
unfortunately
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unfortunately,
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there are backward thinking traditions that
instead
of
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about the goods of humanity,
they
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cannot
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be longer accepted inasmuch as they threaten morality and even hurt animals.
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I will state an unbiased perspective about remaining traditional culture, without losing focus on the drawbacks of keeping it. On one hand, there are interesting
venues
that keep running in the cultures and strengthen the meaning of being part of a region.
For instance
, in
Colombia
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we have several festivals and a rich culture regarding being supportive by giving a helpful hand to our neighbors. To give an example,
this
can be seen
in
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the
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spell day, in which people light a spell spreading good vibes to people who need pep talks,
such
festivity
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us we must maintain some of them.
Nonetheless
, not every traditional
culture
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venue brings out the best as
human-beings
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. Some
venues
determine human cruelty mindsets that should not be allowed,
such
as bullfighting. Tauromaquia
venues
have been held on since the colonization era, disturbing the
life
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of many bulls
till
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the point that some of them died away from their peers.
This
and other types of events
such
as rooster fighting have to end and be out of the traditions not just in
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of human morality-well, but
also
in
favor
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of animal rights.
To sum up
, society has to analyze their traditions because many of them stand out for the value of being human and retain all positive features
like
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our ancestors did, but others are just wrong.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that your introduction sets a clear framework for the discussion by introducing the topic and outlining the main points to be discussed.
coherence cohesion
Work on the logical progression of ideas with clear transition signals between paragraphs and within body paragraphs to guide the reader through the argument.
coherence cohesion
Develop your ideas fully by expanding on them with more detailed examples and explanations to strengthen the impact of your arguments.
task achievement
Your task response needs to address all parts of the prompt comprehensively, with a balanced discussion of both views, followed by a clear personal stance that is sustained throughout the essay.
task achievement
Clarify your main ideas and make sure they are comprehensive and easily understood, avoiding ambiguity and confusion.
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Make use of more specific and relevant examples to support your points, thereby enhancing the effectiveness of your arguments and task response.

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