Some believe that people today have no interest in maintaining the traditional culture of their country or region. Others believe that it is still important to people that we preserve a traditional way of life. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Across the globe, cultures bring different flavors of
depicturing
the world. Some traditional Verb problem
depicting
venues
point out the family union as society
and part of the region, but Add an article
a society
unfortunately
there are backward thinking traditions that Add a comma
unfortunately,
instead
of remark
about the goods of humanity, Wrong verb form
remarking
they
Correct pronoun usage
apply
cannot
be longer accepted inasmuch as they threaten morality and even hurt animals. Correct your spelling
can no
Hence
, in this
paper
I will state an unbiased perspective about remaining traditional culture, without losing focus on the drawbacks of keeping it.
On one hand, there are interesting Add a comma
paper,
venues
that keep running in the cultures and strengthen the meaning of being part of a region. For instance
, in Colombia
we have several festivals and a rich culture regarding being supportive by giving a helpful hand to our neighbors. To give an example, Add a comma
Colombia,
this
can be seen in
Change preposition
on
the
spell day, in which people light a spell spreading good vibes to people who need pep talks, Correct article usage
apply
such
festivity proof
us we must maintain some of them.
Verb problem
proves to
Nonetheless
, not every traditional culture
venue brings out the best as Replace the word
cultural
human-beings
. Some Correct your spelling
human beings
venues
determine human cruelty mindsets that should not be allowed, such
as bullfighting. Tauromaquia venues
have been held on since the colonization era, disturbing the life
of many bulls Fix the agreement mistake
lives
till
the point that some of them died away from their peers. Change preposition
to
This
and other types of events such
as rooster fighting have to end and be out of the traditions not just in favor
of human morality-well, but Change the spelling
favour
also
in favor
of animal rights.
Change the spelling
favour
To sum up
, society has to analyze their traditions because many of them stand out for the value of being human and retain all positive features like
our ancestors did, but others are just wrong.Replace the word
as
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that your introduction sets a clear framework for the discussion by introducing the topic and outlining the main points to be discussed.
coherence cohesion
Work on the logical progression of ideas with clear transition signals between paragraphs and within body paragraphs to guide the reader through the argument.
coherence cohesion
Develop your ideas fully by expanding on them with more detailed examples and explanations to strengthen the impact of your arguments.
task achievement
Your task response needs to address all parts of the prompt comprehensively, with a balanced discussion of both views, followed by a clear personal stance that is sustained throughout the essay.
task achievement
Clarify your main ideas and make sure they are comprehensive and easily understood, avoiding ambiguity and confusion.
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