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The graph below shows the spending of UK residents on visits abroad between 1993 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The graph below shows the spending of UK residents on visits abroad between 1993 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The line graph illustrates the four types of Britain citizens’
expenditure
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expenditures
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while
traveling
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travelling
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other
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to other
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 countries within
ten-year
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a ten-year
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period
. The measurement is in
billion
 pounds. In general, the four spending categories had increased during the timeline.
Aparently
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Apparently
, the holiday was the most
favorite
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favourite
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 thing to do overseas owing to the expenses.
Initially
, the UK
natives
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 biggest allocation
funds
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of funds
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 was
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for holiday
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holiday
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holidays
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, which
start
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started
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 at 9
billion
 in 1993 and had
considerable
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a considerable
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 surge
upto
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up to
 approximately 25
billion
 in 2008. Unfortunately, it
was
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plummeted
for
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to
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 about 3
billion
 in 2009. Afterwards, the figure remained stable at around 22
billion
 within
4-year
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a 4-year
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period
 and
reach
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reached
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 almost 24
billion
 in 2013. The other three
categories
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categories'
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 numbers were down below the holiday by close to 6
billion
. The Business
as
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in
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the
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second place with nearly 3
billion
 in 1993,
experiences
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experienced
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a fluctuated
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fluctuated
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fluctuating
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 increase during the
period
 and reached almost 5
billion
 in 2013.
British
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 residents another expense when
travel
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travelling
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 abroad
was visit
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was visiting
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 friends and their relatives. The figure experienced upward during the
period
 and
remaned
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remained
 stable for the
last
 5 years with around 5
billion
.
In addition
,
miscellanous
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miscellaneous
 spending was the lowest number with more or less 2
billion
 during the ten-year
period
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words period, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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