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Consumers are faced with increasing numbers of advertisements from competing companies. To what extent do you think are consumers influenced by advertisement? What measures can be taken to protect them?

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The number of
advertisements
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 is becoming more widespread in many parts of the world. There are several problems caused by
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 trend, and various solutions could be taken to improve the situation. There are a variety
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 different problems of
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 phenomenon.
To begin
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 with, having many details about
advertisements
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 from
companies
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makes
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distract
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 consumers distracted with their
choice
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choices
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.
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example
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, on
program
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a program
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 TV people want to buy a
desk
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 but
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 three
advertisements
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 that they buy a
desk
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 so people must think about choosing a
desk
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 better, a
desk
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 has a comfortable price and good quality. Another significant problem to mention is that the
incresing
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increasing
 number of
advertisements
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 from competing
companies
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 causes
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 for viewers.
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, having
advertisements
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 over in program TV
make to effect
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 viewers because they watch programs which they like and don't want to lose emotion. Despite
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these circumstances, there are several solutions that governments could take to solve the problems.
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, an effective solution would be to
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 the organizer and government about checking
advertisements
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 comfortably.
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,
Youtube
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YouTube
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 should check a number of
advertisements
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 because people are watching the song but
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 an advertisement appearance which affects to viewer. The second measure would be for governments to approve real
advertisements
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 and fake
advertisements
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 to consumers avoid cheating.
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, before accepting
advertisements
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 grow programs to sell the government and organizers must check all the
detail
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details
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 about
companies
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 and products, so when consumers buy products will avoid poor quality goods. In conclusion, the problem of increasing numbers of
advertisements
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 from competing
companies
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 is unlikely to be entirely eliminated in the short term.
However
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, various measures can be taken to tackle the issue to reduce the effects it is having on the current society

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coherence cohesion
Please make sure to structure your essay properly with clear paragraphs including an introduction, at least two body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Each paragraph should have a clear central idea and follow logically from one to the next. Avoid overly complex or run-on sentences that can confuse the reader.
task achievement
For a high score in task achievement, ensure that you fully address all parts of the prompt. This includes discussing the extent to which consumers are influenced by advertisements and proposing specific measures that can be taken to protect them. Provide more detailed examples and explanations to illustrate your points.

Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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