Some people believe that schoolchildren should not be given homework by their teachers, whereas others argue that homework plays an important role in the education of children. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Some
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think that teachers should not give
homework
to
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schoolchildren
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while
other
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believe
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the house
has
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necessary practical ability in the education of
children
. In my view,
homework
is a
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of acquiring
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knowledge
for
children
and has
a
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benefits as well.
To begin
with, giving
children
a
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homework
has a crucial role
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it has
a
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serveral
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several
advantage
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advantages
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in their
life
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lives
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or higher education. There is a literacy education that
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into the
school
curriculum
such
as pragtical skills, analysis,
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problem-solving
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, and critical thinking. It is a good
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profit
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for
a
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kids
that they can get from
school
or
homework
because it is not only a writing paper or reading book but it has
a pragmatic lessons
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pragmatic lessons
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. Sometimes it is an
assigment
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assignment
in the class that they do not finish or
teacher
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the teacher
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want
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wants
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a
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the
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kids
to understand more. A classic example,
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was a child in my
school
that my
teacher
usually gave
homework
specialy
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specially
especially
speciality
in
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at
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the weekend
cause
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she wanted us to improve and review lots of things that we had learned
from
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a long week or a month.
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it has an importance
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about
a responsibility for
children
due to
manage a
time
and deal with
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problems
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from
homework
or
time
table that they have to deal with and
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separate
from any
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distribution
disruption
in their day life.
For me
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,
i
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think that
teacher
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teachers
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should give
homework
for
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to
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a
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kids
while
it should
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have
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a scope and individual
kids
that teachers have to look after their
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child
.
On the other hand
, some
school
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schools
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or
teacher
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teachers
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is
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not try to
undestand
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understand
or
dintinguish
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distinguish
a
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number of
homework
and
a
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time
period. Because some
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give
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a lot of
homework
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for
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to
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their
kids
but do not care or
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get
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to know them as well. It will be a
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dangerous
thing or make a
children
get
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stressed
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and
pressure
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pressured
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that they will sad or hate
school
. So some kid will
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want to stay home or has
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bad
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that will
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a
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bad
mentalhealth
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mental health
in the future.
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, my
cousine
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cousin
cousins
got a lot of
homework
everyday
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every day
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then
he could not finish on
time
and he felt street and
cry
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cried
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. More he did not want to go to
school
and at least he
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failed
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a test and did not want to study anything at
school
. It is a
a
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situation
and
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affect
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to
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their future and their career path. So
that
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more
homework
can
has
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be
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a
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overwhelming for a child if it is not
equal
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ways
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way
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to teach
a
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children
a child
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children
. In conclusion,
homework
with
children
has
a
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two side
effect
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effects
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that an older should
be understand
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understand
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the ways that will suitable with their
kids
.
For parents
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should take care
and
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of and
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help them
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because
it has to be
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responsibility when
your
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their
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kid
come
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back home. There will be a happy
school
life for
a
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kids
and they can get
a
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high benefits from
school
and grow up
with
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the way that they enjoy.
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Task Achievement
The essay argumentation shows an attempt to discuss both viewpoints and include a personal opinion, yet the response is incomplete and lacks clear, comprehensive ideas. Fulfilling the task also implies that the positions are developed sufficiently throughout the essay, ensuring that each paragraph has a clear central idea and that the argument does not meander.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay presents ideas in an unclear and disorganized manner. Logical structure could be greatly improved with proper paragraphing and the use of linking words. The main points should be distinctly separated and elaborated upon to aid the reader in understanding the progression of ideas. The introduction and conclusion are present but not effective. They should clearly address the question and summarize the main points of the essay, respectively.

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