The pie charts show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010.

The pie charts show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010.
The pie charts illustrate the average household spending in two different countries, namely
Japan
and
Malaysia
, in the period from January to December 2010.
Overall
, it is clear from the charts that healthcare expenditure made up the lowest percentage.
However
, people in the two nations spent most of their money on housing, food, and other goods and services. In
Malaysia
, housing expenditures occupied the highest proportion of total expenditures, at 34%,
while
in
Japan
, that figure was 21%.
Japan
had the highest percentage of expenditure on other goods and services at 29%, higher than that
in
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Malaysia
,
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under a quarter. The rate of money spent on food in
Malaysia
ranked second among all categories, with 27%,
while
that figure in
Japan
stood at 24%. It is interesting to note that the proportion of transport in
Japan
was twice as high as in
Malaysia
. Healthcare expenditure accounted for 3% and 6% in both nations, which was the lowest number on the charts.
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  • household expenditures
  • proportion
  • cultural differences
  • economic differences
  • living standards
  • real estate market
  • public transportation
  • private transportation
  • infrastructure
  • government healthcare policies
  • quality of life
  • holistic view
  • inflation
  • economic growth
  • societal norms
  • globalization
  • communication expenses
  • education expenses
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