The map below shows the village of Stokeford in 1930 and in 2010.

The map below shows the village of Stokeford in 1930 and in 2010.
The maps display the village of Stokeford in two different years 1930 and 2010.
Overall
,
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primary school increased in size,
as well as
the residential area, which is located on both sides of the road.
Also
, there are appeared some new features.
Firstly
, the biggest change, which is the most noticeable is that the gardens changed to retirement
home
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.
Although
, there are a couple of trees left there. The road became bigger and more variable through the years.
In addition
, to changes, there is no more farmland in 2010.
However
, there are some things, which did not change,
such
as the post office, the location of the bridge and the main road.
In contrast
, the shops disappeared from the map in the second given year.
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