There are those who claim that big cities are much suitable places for adolescence to live in. Do you agree or disagree?

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Teenager

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period is considered the golden period of life

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all the

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and

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should be needed. Some claim that Cities are

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choice for

adolescence

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adolescents

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to grow up

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of the rural

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this

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with, metropolitan

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have all the advanced facilities to enhance teenager's life

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as advanced education. Cities have the best school with

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modernised laboratory facilities, smart

classroom

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plenty of

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one roof,

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, adolescent can get the best quality of education and

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will enhance

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career

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opportunities

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future.

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the

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Mumbai state of India, most families have migrated from

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place for their younger

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future sake because all the

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are locate

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there. Recreational facilities

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have

in town

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location

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locations

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, the younger people like to enjoy some

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entertainment based

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amenities

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are over there.

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, urban

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are the best choice for youth.

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, multinational and corporate companies are only in cities and their business is

assosiated

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associated

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with

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metropolitan locations. When teens live in

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urban venue

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while

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she or he might get the job

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opportunity

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international

companies because there are

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numerous

chances are spilled on the floor only in urbanised

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, communication skills

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needed to get

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international

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provide

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all the

amenities

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even language courses and classes

too

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to learn any new skills

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city

places

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because all

available

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in one location.

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, urbanised locations have plenty of career chances for adolescents and they can get the best quality of education over there. Recreational

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along with

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big enterprises are located in metropolitan

places

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, I strongly agree with

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statement in the

above-mentione

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above-mentioned

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details

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trend drives more benefits to society.

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task achievement

Your introduction did not set up the argument effectively. A clear thesis statement is missing, which should express your agreement or disagreement with the assertion in question. It's essential to clearly state your position on the topic in the essay, ideally in your introduction, so that the reader knows what to expect in the following paragraphs.

coherence cohesion

The essay's logical structure is weak; ideas need to be organized more systematically. Paragraphs should be distinctly structured, with each paragraph focusing on a single main idea, supported by specific examples or explanations, and linked logically to the following paragraph.

coherence cohesion

Main points are not sufficiently developed with relevant examples, and evidence is sparse. Each main point must be fully expanded with clear arguments and examples to support your ideas. Increased specificity will improve the essay's impact and persuasiveness.

task achievement

The examples provided to support arguments are insufficiently relevant or developed. Make sure that each example is directly connected to the point it is intended to illustrate, and elaborate on how it supports your argument. Include more detailed, context-specific examples to strengthen your essay.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

306 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

adolescence
suitable
advantages
educational opportunities
cultural experiences
recreational activities
healthcare facilities
networking
career opportunities
disadvantages
cost of living
competition
pressure
close-knit communities
pollution
environmental issues
safety concerns
conclusion

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