Write about the following topic: Some people believe that they should be able to keep all the money they earn, and should not have to pay tax to the state. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.
I usually find some cases that can relate
with
Change preposition
to
this
topic. Tax
may be a sensitive things
to discuss by some people that have a high Correct the article-noun agreement
a sensitive thing
sensitive things
salary
but they also
have many responsibilty
in their home. Correct your spelling
responsibility
For
example
I have come across several cases, Add a comma
example,
they
have a minimum Rephrase
where they
salary
that
must Correct word choice
and
to
pay the Change the verb form
apply
tax
too but they decide to not pay the tax
just because they have still many responsibility
to pay their children's school Change to a plural noun
responsibilities
fee
, to meet household needs, etc. They ask that pay Fix the agreement mistake
fees
tax
makes they
have difficulty with Correct pronoun usage
them
this
. So that's why more people only want to earn money than save that for some their
Change preposition
of their
need
.
But, in Fix the agreement mistake
needs
this
cases
. as citizens who have the obligation to pay Fix the agreement mistake
case
taxes
, we should be obey
the rules Change the verb form
obey
in
our Change preposition
of
country
. Pay taxes
is must
if we have a Correct article usage
a must
salary
that able
to pay Add a missing verb
is able
tax
. Tax
regulation said that tax
deductions will be deducted according to
the amount of salary
you get. The tax
will deductions
only a few Replace the word
deduct
percent
from Change the spelling
per cent
your
Change the word
the
salary
that you gave from your company.
We should Unnecessary verb
apply
be
realize that we must Verb problem
apply
Fix the infinitive
apply
to
pay Verb problem
apply
taxes
in our country
. Because as citizens of course we usually use state facilities such
as used
Verb problem
apply
a
road.
As we know some state facilities are made from the Correct article usage
apply
taxes
we have paid.
Besides
that, we always found
another way to pay Wrong verb form
find
tax
for examples
, if we Fix the agreement mistake
example
bought
some goods or foods at the mall or restaurant, we automatically pay for 10 Wrong verb form
buy
percent
Change the spelling
per cent
tax
.
On this
topic
I disagree if people only earn their money but they forget to carry out their responsibilities as citizens to pay Add a comma
topic,
tax
but without realizing it, they always use state facilities.
We must Fix the agreement mistake
taxes
to
help our Fix the infinitive
apply
country
become a country
thay
complies with regulations.Correct your spelling
that
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task achievement
Your essay did not fully address all parts of the task. The prompt asked you to discuss your extent of agreement or disagreement with the notion that individuals should not pay taxes. Your argument was somewhat one-sided and didn't acknowledge the counter-arguments adequately. A more balanced approach could have strengthened your position. Additionally, providing a clear thesis statement at the end of your introduction would help to improve the clarity of your stance.
coherence cohesion
Your essay lacks a coherent structure; this makes it difficult for the reader to follow your argument. You should organize your ideas into clear paragraphs with topic sentences that introduce the main idea of each paragraph. Also, make sure that you use logical connectors and transition words to better link your ideas within and between paragraphs.
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- Sentence 1 - Background statement
- Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
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- Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
- Sentence 4 - Conclusion
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
- Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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- Sentence 1 - Summary
- Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
- Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation
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