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Nowadays, families have been affected by

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social evolution, some

fathers

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prefer taking care of their children

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the mothers

work

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. There are several reasons to explain

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, which we will discuss. A different approach to

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has seen the world recently. One of the major reasons

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changes in the societies that have greatly impacted the family ideal of the working father and the mother who stays at home. As time goes by,

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social consciousness has been rising in today’s world societies,

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thus

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provoking multiple changes in people’s vision

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things, like

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labor

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this

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case.

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, more women decide to fight against the old

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vision that we have

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and begin to

work

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even as

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mother

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fathers

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stop working to dedicate themselves to their children. I believe that

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development has been positive.

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, now people are freer to do what they want

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it is staying at home or having a labor.

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change

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in people’s

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also

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benefits the

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can now spend more time with them and enjoy their childhood.

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is an important victory in the feminist movement: now they are no longer seen as simple housewives but occupy the same place as men in

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society and more precisely in the workplace.

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, to illustrate that

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change

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is important, we can see that in some emerging countries which have not experienced

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the situation is unbelievably bad for women like in Palestine where they do not have the right to

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, there has been an evolution that has marked our living environment, that of mothers who

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more and

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who decide to stay at home.

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is explained by the fight for women’s rights

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men who evolve on their part and

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development has had a positive impact. Given

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this

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change

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will continue to increase for a few years.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words fathers, work, change with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 6 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "stays" was used 2 times.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

328 words

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recycling, waste management, sustainability
collection centers, transportation, recycling plant
sorting, separation, grades, types
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screening, de-inking, cleaning, contaminants
refining, bleaching, color stripping, quality
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