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The system used for rubbish/garbage collection in your local area is not working properly. This is causing problems for you and your neighbours. Write a letter to the local council. In your letter 1)Describe how the rubbish collection system is not working properly 2)Explain how this is affecting you and your neighbours 3)Suggest what should be done about the problem Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses Begin your letter as follows Dear Sir,

#system #rubbish #garbage #collection #area #neighbours #council #addresses #sir
Dear Sir I am
resident
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a resident
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 of sector 21
panchkula
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Panchkula
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 and want to bring
into
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to
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 your awareness and complain about the non-function community
garbage
bin
 which has become a headache for our residents. The
garbage
bin
's window slider system is not working properly and
as a result
, we are facing difficulty
to
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in disposing
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dispose
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 our household waste.
To begin
 with, people need to exert a lot of force to open the waste container.
This
 has resulted in a major inconvenience for our elderly residents
due to
 their physical limitations
..
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.
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 Not only
this
, Mr. Sham, my neighbour, has injured his shoulder
while
 putting excessive effort
to slide
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into sliding
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 the side door to open the
garbage
bin
.
Consequently
, people have started throwing their waste near the
bin
, causing bad
smell
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 and excessive flies and mosquitos to breed, which, in turn,
posing
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poses
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 many health risks,
such
 as malaria and dengue diseases. Considering the aforementioned reasons, I suggest
to replace
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replacing
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existing
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the existing
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garbage
 container with a new one I would
also
advice
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to
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you to
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 thoroughly examine for any development of rust so that we do not face the same problem again.
Additionally
, it is important to remove the
garbage
that is
 accumulated near the
bin
 in order to prevent
breeding
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the breeding
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 of malicious insects. Your cooperation in
this
 matter will be highly appreciated. I am looking forward to
see
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seeing
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 how much suggestions
translates
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translate
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 into
a
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apply
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swift action from your side given the gravity of
situation
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the situation
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. Yours sincerely Rohit
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Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure that there is a clear introduction, body, and conclusion to your letter.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use a range of cohesive devices (such as 'firstly', 'moreover', 'therefore') to structure your arguments clearly.
Task Achievement
Try to maintain a more formal tone by avoiding contractions (e.g., use 'cannot' instead of 'can't', and 'will not' instead of 'won't').
Task Achievement
Provide a wider range of solutions to demonstrate your ability to address the issue comprehensively.
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