The charts below show the total number of applicants the year before and the year after Doolittle University’s social media advertising campaign, organized by age range and how close the applicants live to the university.
The bar chart illustrates the number of individuals who applied for United Kingdom
Collage
from various nations for a period of 5 years.
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College
Overall
, the majority of students who applied for higher learning came from European nations and Far
East, Correct article usage
the Far
whereas
only a few applications
where
from Africa.
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were
Initially
, it is
observed that many learners were from European nations with roughly thirty Wrong verb form
was
thousands
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thousand
applications
, but by 2003, it was Far East applicants who applied mostly. Moreover
, in 2001 and 2002, over 20,000 students applied from Far
East and those from Europe were vice visa. Correct article usage
the Far
In
addition
the number of European pupils who came to UK university in 2000 were 5000 more than those from Add a comma
addition,
Far
East.
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the Far
Furthermore
, it is clearly seen that Middle East
students were almost three times higher than those from Africa in 1999 and more pupils kept applying Replace the word
Eastern
hence
showing a growth in applications
throughout the whole period expect
in 2002 Correct your spelling
except
when
when we witnessed a drop Rephrase
apply
from
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in
East
members. Replace the word
Eastern
Additionally
, only a neglegable
number of applicants came from Africa with under 10,000 Correct your spelling
negligible
applications
hence
making this
country the least nation that showed interest in UK Collage
.Correct your spelling
college
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