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The charts below show the total number of applicants the year before and the year after Doolittle University’s social media advertising campaign, organized by age range and how close the applicants live to the university.

The charts below show the total number of applicants the year before and the year after Doolittle University’s social media advertising campaign, organized by age range and how close the applicants live to the university.
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The bar chart illustrates the number of individuals who applied for United Kingdom
Collage
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College
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 from various nations for a period of 5 years.
Overall
, the majority of students who applied for higher learning came from European nations and
Far
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the Far
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 East,
whereas
 only a few
applications
where
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were
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 from Africa.
Initially
, it
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 observed that many learners were from European nations with roughly thirty
thousands
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applications
, but by 2003, it was Far East applicants who applied mostly.
Moreover
, in 2001 and 2002, over 20,000 students applied from
Far
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the Far
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 East and those from Europe were vice visa.
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 the number of European pupils who came to UK university in 2000 were 5000 more than those from
Far
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the Far
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 East.
Furthermore
, it is clearly seen that Middle
East
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 students were almost three times higher than those from Africa in 1999 and more pupils kept applying
hence
 showing a growth in
applications
 throughout the whole period
expect
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except
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 in 2002
when
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apply
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when we witnessed a drop
from
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 Middle
East
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 members.
Additionally
, only a
neglegable
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negligible
 number of applicants came from Africa with under 10,000
applications
hence
 making
this
 country the least nation that showed interest in UK
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college
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "hence".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words applications with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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