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The pie graphs show the nutritional consistency of two dinners. Write a report to a university lecturer describing the data.

The pie graphs show the nutritional consistency of two dinners. Write a report to a university lecturer describing the data.
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Describe the data for
university
Correct article usage
the university
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lecture
Fix the agreement mistake
lectures
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 write down the given pie graphs
show
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showing
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 the nutritional consistency of two dinners.
Overalll
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Overall
, the graph illustrates
about
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apply
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the
Medium
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 Baked
Potato
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 and Macaroni which consists of
carbohydrates
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, Protein,
Glucose
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 15
percentage
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, Saturated fat and other
nutrients
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 .
To begin
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 with,
Medium
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 Baked
Potato
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which have
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has
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 five ingredients
firstly
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Carbohydrates
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 which
as
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a
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 major
share
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 of 35 per
cent
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,
secondly
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 protein which is the second largest
percentage
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share
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 of 25
per
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per cent per cent
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cent
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,
thirdly
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Glucose
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 as its
percentage
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 of 15, Saturated fat 10 per
cent
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 and Other
Nutrients
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 15
percentage
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. On
otherside
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the other hand
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, Macaroni which as
carbohydrates
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 which
as
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apply
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is 52 per
cent
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share
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, Protein as its 11 per
cent
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,
and
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apply
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Glucose
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also
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 as its 11 per
cent
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, Other
nutrients
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 as its 5
percentage
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 of
share
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 and
finally
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 Saturated fat
as
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is
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 21 per
cent
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.
Comparitively
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Comparatively
, after analysing
the
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both
Carbohydrates
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 as
its
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their
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 large
share
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,
Glucose
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 as its 15 per
cent
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 in
Medium
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 Baked
Potato
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 and
in
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apply
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Macaroni as its 11 per
cent
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 and
nutrients
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 as its high in
Medium
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 Baked
Potato
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words medium, potato, carbohydrates, glucose, percentage, nutrients, share, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "data" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutritional consistency
  • carbohydrates
  • proteins
  • fats
  • vitamins
  • minerals
  • fiber
  • proportion
  • component
  • pie graph
  • comparison
  • significant
  • balance
  • healthy
  • dietary choices
  • implications
  • absent
  • presence
  • macro-nutrients
  • micro-nutrients
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