The diagrams below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
The provided charts display the map of Grange Park currently compared to the opening condition in 1920.
Overall
, both diagrams share the main features or attractions of the park at different times. While
there have been many upgrades since 1920 such
as the amphitheatre replacing the stage for superior music performance, it still preserves the rose gardens and even puts one of them in the centre. In addition
to that, there are new services like a cafe and a playing area for children to improve everyone's experience and enjoyment.
In 1920, there were 2 entrances to the garden, from Arnold Avenue and Eldon Street, and the fountain would be the first thing they could see because it was located in the heart of the plaza. On one side
of the park, there was a stage provided for musicians to play in between 2 rose plazas. Additionally
, there were 4 benches distributed around there for people to enjoy the show or just to stretch their legs. On the other side
, there was another rose garden, a seat, a greenhouse, and a pond for water plants.
Fast forward to today, the fountain is being replaced with big
rose garden and 4 seats around it. Correct article usage
a big
In addition
, the stage was also
replaced with an amphitheatre and this
change also
removed one of the rose gardens and all of the benches from this
side
. The other side
looks very different compared to before, where there are new installations of a water feature, a cafe, and a children's recreational area.Submitted by gurunnevada on
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