Success is often measured by wealth and material belongings. Do you think wealth is the best measure of success? What makes a successful person
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Coherence/Cohesion
Ensure that the introduction directly addresses the essay question with a clear stance and establish a thesis statement that guides the reader on your perspective on wealth and success. The conclusion should restate your main points and firmly cement your argument.
Coherence/Cohesion
Organize your ideas into clear, logical paragraphs with topic sentences. Transition smoothly between sentences and paragraphs to guide readers through your argument. Use a variety of linking words effectively to improve the flow.
Coherence/Cohesion
Develop each main point with detailed explanations and relevant examples. Make sure each paragraph has one clear main idea and support it with evidence.
Task Achievement
Address all parts of the prompt. The response should fully answer the question of whether wealth is the best measure of success and what makes a person successful. Provide an in-depth exploration of your position on success without diverting into tangential discussions.
Task Achievement
Present ideas clearly and elaborate on them comprehensively. Avoid vague or general statements by explaining your points in depth. Use specific examples to substantiate your arguments.
Task Achievement
Use examples that are directly relevant to your argument about success. The examples should clearly illustrate the point you are making and be specific enough to support your thesis effectively.