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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below shows numbers of incidents and injuries per 100 million passenger miles travelled (PMT) by transportation type in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below shows numbers of incidents and injuries per 100 million passenger miles travelled (PMT) by transportation type in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The bar graph displays the numbers of
incidents
 and
injuries
 for every 100 million passenger miles travelled on five different types of public transport in 2002.
Overall
, most
incidents
 and
injuries
 took place on demand-respond vehicles.
By contrast
, commuter
rail
services
 recorded by far the lowest figures. A total of 225
incidents
 and 173
injuries
, per 100 million passenger miles travelled, took place on demand-respond transport service. These figures were nearly three times as high as those for the second highest category, bus
services
. There were 76
incidents
 and 66 people were injured on buses.
Rail
services
 experienced fewer problems. The number of
incidents
 on light
rail
 trains equalled the figure recorded for buses, but there were significantly fewer
injuries
, at only 39. Heavy
rail
services
 saw a lower number of
incidents
 than light
rail
services
, but the figure of
injuries
 was nearly equal to those for light
rail
services
. Commuter
rail
 passengers were even less likely to experience problems, in fact, only 20
incidents
 and 17
injuries
 occurred on commuter trains.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words incidents, injuries, rail, services with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "numbers of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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