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The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make compatisons where relevant.

The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make compatisons where relevant.
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The maps illustrate the development of the village of
Ryemouth
Correct your spelling
Tynemouth
 between 1995 and now.
Overall
, the fishing port has existed, the
darmland
Correct your spelling
farmland
 was replaced by the golf area and
forest
Correct article usage
the forest
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park
 was
deforestated
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deforested
deforestation
 by tennis places,
many
Correct word choice
and many
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 houses
are
Wrong verb form
have been
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 added.
According to
 the maps show the northwest of Reymouth had few houses in 1930 but now houses are more located.
The
Correct article usage
apply
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Southwest
place
Capitalize word
Place
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 had
shop
Add an article
a shop
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 but now
this
 name changed by the restaurant and under the shop had
fish
Correct article usage
a fish
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 market but now it has
few
Correct article usage
a few
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 apartments. The fishing port has existed. The north-east had the farmland, it
replaced
Add a missing verb
was replaced
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 by the golf area and the forest area under the farmland was eliminated by the forest
park
. The south-east had the hotel and it
does
Wrong verb form
did
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 not change anything but added with car
park
.
Under the
Change preposition
The
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 car
park
does
Verb problem
has
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 not
change
Wrong verb form
changed
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 anything and now
also
Rephrase
apply
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it
has
Verb problem
is also
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 the same place.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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