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If you cannot meet your friend, tell him/her to meet you another time.

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ı am writing to thank you for your invitation.It is very kind of you but
unfortunately
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unfortunately,
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 I won't be able to make it
due to
 my very hectic work schedule. Let me explain my situation in more detail.I have recently started a new job teaching English and ı have been working around the clock.I do not mean to complain;I have been enjoying it immensely.The school ı am working at is actually my old high school.It is really quite interesting teaching with people who used to be my teachers. could you let me know of another time you will be free?I would love to come to stay.I am interested in seeing your new house and meeting your wife.I will be free in the new year because of
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school holidays and ı will
also
 be free in winter.I would certainly love to escape the cold to visit you
then
! please let me know your friend, Ahmet
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Task Achievement
To improve your score in Task Achievement, ensure that all parts of the task are sufficiently covered. For an IELTS letter, it's important to address each bullet point provided in the question prompt fully and appropriately. Make sure your response is more complete by directly acknowledging the reason for not being able to meet, proposing an alternative arrangement, and offering an apology according to the conventions of informal letter-writing.
Coherence & Cohesion
For higher coherence and cohesion scores, utilize a range of cohesive devices effectively, including referencing words, substitutions, and discourse markers that signal the relationship between sentences and paragraphs. Ensure the logical progression of ideas throughout your letter, with clear introductory and concluding paragraphs. As the examiner, I noted that your response did not include a final salutation which could make the conclusion clearer, such as 'Kind regards' or 'Looking forward to your reply'.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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