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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO,) emissions per person ni the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO,) emissions per person ni the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.
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The graph provides information on the average per capita carbon dioxide
emissions
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 of four countries from 1967 to 2007.
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it is clear that
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while
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 the UK has the highest average CO2
emissions
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, Sweden's
output
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 has fallen over the same period. ​At the same time, people in Italy and Portugal showed a significant rise in their
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 levels. In 1967, UK production led to the highest levels of pollution, resulting in approximately 11 metric
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 of CO2 per person
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The next highest emitters were the Swedes, responsible for around 8.5
tonnes
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 per person, which is two times the average Italian
output
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 and 16 times the average Portuguese
output
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The UK's CO2
output
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 has fallen gradually over the past 40 years, but despite a surge in 1970, people in Sweden
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 cut their
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 dramatically until 2007
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They account for only 5 metric tons each.
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, after 1967,
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 from Italy and Portugal increased
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At the end
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 of the given period, Italy was the second highest polluter, with about 8 metric
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,
while
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 in Portugal,
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 it was still the lowest emitter
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 Sweden, just under 6 metric
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 were produced per person.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words emissions, output, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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