It is not necessary to travel to other places to learn about other cultures of other people. We can learn just as much from books,films and the Internet.Do you agree or disagree?

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Some people claim that we do not have to travel abroad,in order to understand the
culture
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of a country.We can simply find out about
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from books,movies,and
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websites.I totally agree with
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view,since there are many sites which
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you to get
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plenty of
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.In the forthcoming paragraphs,I shall expound my thoughts in detail.
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with,in today's
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we have
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huge sources of
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,
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as the internet and social media,films,
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and books
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that
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us an opportunity to learn about
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.There are lots of sites that inform us about traditions,special foods,traditional things and the mentality of the country.
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,
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Youtube,
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Youtube
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YouTube
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we can find numerous videos and materials that show people's traditions,
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the clothes
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they wear,their language and so on.If you are eager to know about
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,you can go
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,
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however
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it will cost a lot of money.
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,searching
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various types of websites about
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is a good way to both
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your money and
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more about
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.
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,the advantageous way of acquiring knowledge about
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is using social
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media
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.There are a bunch of individuals that spend their time on social
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.You can follow them or communicate with them and they can tell or show about their lifestyle.
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,the best app
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this
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case is Instagram.There,you can follow various types of people and you can see their posts or stories.In their publications and stories,you can be informed about the location,
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the
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,about the landmarks.You can chat with them in order to know more.
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,using social media can be helpful to seize more
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about inhabitants and the
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easily.
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,social media,websites in networks and other types of sources can be beneficial in
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learning
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since
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opens
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various ways and
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you more
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about traditions,citizens and languages of
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country
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Authentic experiences
  • Cultural immersion
  • Sensory learning
  • Cost-effective
  • Language barriers
  • Interpersonal interactions
  • Balanced approach
  • Virtual tours
  • Lived experiences
  • Credibility of sources
  • Misconceptions
  • Multicultural competency
  • Stimulate curiosity
  • Digital platforms
  • Stereotypes
  • Environmentally sustainable
  • Hands-on experience
  • Global perspective
  • Biased information
  • Cultural nuances
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