In some countries, more and more fathers take care of their children at home while mothers work full-time. what's the reason for this? is it a positive or negative development?

In
this
contemporary epoch, fathers have started taking care of
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children
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while
mothers are working permanently.
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reasons why fathers
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after
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children
and
mothers
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go to work has numerous merits for society in upcoming paragraphs. Nowadays,
women
has
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started realizing the fact that they are no less than the man. In earlier times,
women
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to stay at home and look after the family and
children
without giving a thought about their career and life but now ladies are career-oriented and
wants
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to build their own empire.
Men
supporting their
women
wants
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to see their
betterhalf
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growing, so they are helping them by looking after the
children
and family.
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people have started to believe in
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to equality and are giving equal importance to
men
and
women
which leads to working
women
and
men
raising
children
and
family
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families
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.
Moreover
, it is believed that
women
are more focussed and responsible than
men
so they are likely to achieve higher levels of success as compared to
men
. I completely consider
this
as a positive development because everyone
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the right to do whatever they want. If girls are working and boys are staying home we should appreciate both of them because working full time
as well as
taking care of kids are equally important
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.
On the other hand
, it gives opportunity to
children
to enjoy
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themselves with
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their father and mother both as it is known that kids are always
more close
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to their mother but
this
will give
children
an opportunity to get close to their father.
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the contemporary,
women
gets
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a chance to know the world properly rather than just sitting at home.
Thus
, it is a
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situation for both of them.
For instance
, scientists believe that ladies are more emotionally strong than
man
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men
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,
therefore
, they are more likely to deal properly with the outer world than
man
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men
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.
To conclude
, it can be analyzed from
above
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discussion that there are numerous pros of
women
working outside and
father
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fathers
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taking care of
children
for society.
Hence
, it is suggested to promote among people.
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