Now-a-days many people choose to be self-employed, rather than work for a company. What could be the advantages and disadvantages of being self-employed?

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In
this
contemporary epoch, most people are willing to
work
at
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their own
instead
of working as
a
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employee in any
company
.
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essay intends to elaborate merits
as well as
demerits of people being self-employed, in upcoming paragraphs. First of all, the main reason
of
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starting a business is that no one wants to
work
under any boss, everyone wants to be their own boss.
Therefore
,
this
gives the freedom to a
person
to
work
in a way they want.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
, employees get a fixed amount
of
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salary every month
whereas
if
company
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a company
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earns profit it will all go to the individual running it.
Thus
, everyone wants to earn more money
that
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which
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is why they are willing to start their own and make progress.
For example
, if
company
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the company
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gets a big consignment, all the profit will go
the
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owner
instead
of
employees
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the employees
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. On the flip side, working with any
company
give
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gives
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employees
a
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apply
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job security. Every month
person
gets money to support their family. It is easy for
person
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a person
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to repeat the same job
everyday
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which keeps the human being away from
work
anxiety and depression.
Moreover
, companies provide insurance as well which aids the individual during illness or injury
whereas
if
person
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a person
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running their own
person
gets sick they have to face
financial
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a financial
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crisis.
For example
,
a
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an
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IT worker employed in a
multi-national
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multinational
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company
gets all the financial benefits from the
company
.
To conclude
, it can be analyzed from
above
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discussion that
although
there are numerous pros of running a business
but
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it's
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its
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drawbacks cannot be overlooked.
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