Sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information, such as their hobbies and interests, and whether they are married or single. Some people say that this information may be relevant and useful. Others disagree. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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survival in
this
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person
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,food and shelter and in all of them,
significant
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role is played by
job
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a job
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. One handful of people believe that it is a helpful
way
of collecting
the
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information
related to any
employee
who is selected for the
job
because it helps the
employer
to know that
person
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abilities and
strength
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strengths
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in their field. Another set of people think that it is
an
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irrelevant to take any personal
information
may be
such
data may be inaccurate provided by the
employee
just for the sake of
work
. In my opinion, it is right to have it in the
employee
's record. On the one hand, it is a useful
way
to keep the
job
seeker
infomation
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information
in the record for future use.
However
,
this
is an easy
way
to access any
canadate's
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candidate's
candidates
interest and know about their personality and
abililty
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ability
to
work
in that field.
For instance
, if
employer
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an employer
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wants to understand the
capabillity
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capability
of his worker,
then
he has the report
of
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that
person
's
weekness
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weakness
and strength, which will become a strong point to judge
for
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the
employee
's
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competence to do it.
Hence
, it helps both
employer
and
job
-seeker to
work
together.
On the other hand
,
such
a system of having any personal
information
related to any worker may be not real, futher
this
all
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detail
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may
be
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mislead the
employer
while
giving the title to that
employee
.
For instance
, for the
job
, any
person
put
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wrong
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information
in their details which will not the best
way
to select that
person
or there may be a chance that
a
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best
suit
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for the
job
may
be remain
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umemployed
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unemployed
.
Therefore
, it is not real
information
provided by
job-seeker
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job seekers
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.
To conclude
, it is
best
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way
to know that any
person
who is employed by the company
to know
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about it and it may be just
a not original personal
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not original personal information
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information
, only for
job
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a job
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matching the requirements. In my opinion, it is the best
way
to know about the
person
who will
work
in any company by the company HR who is selecting that
person
.
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