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The graph below gives information about the price of bananas in four countries between 1994 and 2004. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.

The graph below gives information about the price of bananas in four countries between 1994 and 2004. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.
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The line graph
demonstrates
Verb problem
provides
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 us
information
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with information
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 about the cost of bananas in four countries in
eight
Correct determiner usage
a
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 year period. The data is given in US
dollars
Use synonyms
 per kilogram.
Overall
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, It is clear from the graph that
price
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prices
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are
Unnecessary verb
apply
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fluctuated in three countries in the period given, only in the USA it
remain
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remained
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 stable with a slight rise in the beginning.
Firstly
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, the highest price, which
is
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apply
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started from 2
dollars
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 in 1996 in France and Japan
are
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apply
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oscilliated
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oscillated
 and
reminded
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remained
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in
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at
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 the same level in France with a slight increase
for
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of
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 50 cents in Japan in 2004 respectively.
Secondly
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, the cost of bananas in Germany began from 1,5
dollars
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 in 1996,
than
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then
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 it fluctuated in the next four years and stayed between 1,5 and 2
dollars
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 in 2004 respectively. Another interesting fact
that
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is that
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,
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apply
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 the lowest price is shown in the US for 1 dollar per kilogram in 1996 with a small growth
for
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of
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 25 cents and stayed at the same level in the whole period.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Trend
  • Fluctuate
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Stable/Stability
  • Significant
  • Gradual
  • Sharp
  • Slight
  • Peak
  • Plummet
  • Spike
  • Level off
  • Dip
  • Plateau
  • Cost
  • Price
  • Currency
  • Decade
  • Year-on-year
  • Economic factors
  • Consumer demand
  • Inflation
  • Market forces
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