The diagrams below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

The diagrams below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
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The two maps provide information about the changes taking place in a city park from the day it was opened to the present.
Overall
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, it can be seen that Grange Park has been well developed with additional features
such
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as an entertainment centre, cafe and recreational centre for children.
To begin
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with, in the old plan, the entrance to the place was located not only in the north but
also
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in the south.
Moreover
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, there was a pond for water plants which was located in the north-east.
While
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the rose garden was found in the north
as well as
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in the south, it was absent in both the west and east. The map had five seats in all the angles except the northeast. A glass house
as well as
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an entertainment stage were available.
By contrast
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, the Grange field has been well-developed with additional interesting features.
Firstly
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, a rose backyard had been constructed in the middle of the sketch with four seats attached to it.
Secondly
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, A recreational ground for children can now be accessed located in the northeast. Surprisingly, the two entrances remained in the same position. The entertainment place can now be seen in the west portion of the map.
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,the water feature has been placed in the north-south. Unfortunately, only one rose garden remained in its position. Cafes can now be found in the north.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "as well as".
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • transformation
  • developments
  • modifications
  • landscaping
  • recreational needs
  • enhance
  • functionality
  • vegetation
  • environmental conservation
  • infrastructure improvements
  • community involvement
  • diverse groups
  • outdoor activities
  • environmental stewardship
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