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The graph below gives information about the price of bananas in four countries between 1994 and 2004. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.

The graph below gives information about the price of bananas in four countries between 1994 and 2004. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.
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The graph shows the data regarding the
bananas
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price
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prices
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 in the USA, Germany, France and Japan from 1994 to 2004.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the USA had a relatively stable
price
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 for
bananas
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 from 1994 to 2004. In Japan, the banana
price
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 rose gradually regardless of
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the flactuations
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flactuations
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fluctuations
 shown.
However
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, in other countries, the
bananas
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price
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 was not stable
on
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during
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 the given period.
To begin
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 with,
United
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the United
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 States is one country which witnessed
a
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relative stability in the
price
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 of
bananas
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 over a long period of time from 1994 to 2004, and the prices were approximately US1 to slightly just above US1 respectively.
On the contrary
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, Japan is seen to have its banana
price
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increased
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 gradually from around US2 to about
to
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apply
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US2.50 from 1994 to 2004 respectively. In other countries like Germany and France, the
price
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 of
bananas
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flactuated
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fluctuated
fluctuate
 regularly from 1994 to 2004. These countries witnessed
instabality
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instability
 in the
price
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 of
bananas
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 over the given period.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words bananas, price with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Trend
  • Fluctuate
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Stable/Stability
  • Significant
  • Gradual
  • Sharp
  • Slight
  • Peak
  • Plummet
  • Spike
  • Level off
  • Dip
  • Plateau
  • Cost
  • Price
  • Currency
  • Decade
  • Year-on-year
  • Economic factors
  • Consumer demand
  • Inflation
  • Market forces
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