The bar chart shows information about the favorite subjects of students from two middle schools, school A and school B. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The bar chart shows information about the favorite subjects of students from two middle schools, school A and school B. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The given bar graph
illustrate
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illustrates
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a comparison
about
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of
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two different
school
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schools
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,
school
A and
B
, about the five popular subjects, there are social
science
,
science
, language,
craft
/drawing, and
sport
. The units are
measure
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measured
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in total of
students
per course.
Overall
, it is clearly be seen that
sport
was the most
favorit
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favourite
subject
means of
subject
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the subject
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was
sport
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a sport
the sport
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in
school
A. Meanwhile in
school
B
,
craft
/drawing and language
was
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were
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the most liked by pupils. In terms of
subject
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the subject
a subject
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in
school
A, there
was
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were
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36
students
who
choose
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chose
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sport
as their
favorit
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favourite
subject
,
in contrast
only 5
students
for
school
B
.
This
big gap
also
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happens
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happen
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happens
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in
craft
/drawing, with 25
students
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in
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of
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in
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school
B
Replace the word
loving
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love
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loving
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craft
/drawing,
while
only under a fifth in
school
A.
Moreover
, language in
school
B
is the second most
favorit
Correct your spelling
favourite
course in
school
B
, with 18
students
,
while
on
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in
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the
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apply
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school
A
this
course was only liked by 5
students
. Regarding the social
science
subject
, there was a slight gap
of
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between
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school
A and
school
B
, with 6 and 10
of
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apply
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students
, respectively.
On the
contrary
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contrary,
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science
was more popular in
school
A with 9
students
compared to
school
B
only
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with only
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2
students
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words school, b, science, craft, sport, students, subject with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • comparative data
  • favorite subjects
  • middle schools
  • horizontal axis
  • vertical axis
  • quantifies
  • preference
  • initial observation
  • significantly greater interest
  • shared enthusiasm
  • favored
  • attracts more students
  • draws the highest number
  • popularity
  • outliers
  • subject preferences
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