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The bar chart shows information about the favorite subjects of students from two middle schools, school A and school B. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The bar chart shows information about the favorite subjects of students from two middle schools, school A and school B. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The given bar graph
illustrate
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illustrates
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 a comparison
about
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of
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 two different
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school
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schools
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,
school
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 A and
B
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, about the five popular subjects, there are social
science
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,
science
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, language,
craft
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/drawing, and
sport
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. The units are
measure
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 in total of
students
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 per course.
Overall
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, it is clearly be seen that
sport
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 was the most
favorit
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favourite
subject
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 means of
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subject
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the subject
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 was
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sport
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a sport
the sport
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 in
school
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 A. Meanwhile in
school
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B
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,
craft
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/drawing and language
was
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were
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 the most liked by pupils. In terms of
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subject
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the subject
a subject
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 in
school
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 A, there
was
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were
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 36
students
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 who
choose
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chose
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sport
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 as their
favorit
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favourite
subject
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,
in contrast
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 only 5
students
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 for
school
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B
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.
This
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 big gap
also
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happens
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happen
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happens
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 in
craft
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/drawing, with 25
students
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in
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of
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in
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school
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B
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loving
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love
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loving
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craft
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/drawing,
while
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 only under a fifth in
school
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 A.
Moreover
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, language in
school
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B
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 is the second most
favorit
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favourite
 course in
school
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B
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, with 18
students
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,
while
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on
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in
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the
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apply
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school
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 A
this
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 course was only liked by 5
students
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. Regarding the social
science
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subject
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, there was a slight gap
of
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between
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school
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 A and
school
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B
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, with 6 and 10
of
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apply
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students
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, respectively.
On the
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contrary
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contrary,
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science
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 was more popular in
school
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 A with 9
students
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 compared to
school
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B
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only
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with only
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 2
students
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words school, b, science, craft, sport, students, subject with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • comparative data
  • favorite subjects
  • middle schools
  • horizontal axis
  • vertical axis
  • quantifies
  • preference
  • initial observation
  • significantly greater interest
  • shared enthusiasm
  • favored
  • attracts more students
  • draws the highest number
  • popularity
  • outliers
  • subject preferences
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