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The bar chart shows information about the favorite subjects of students from two middle schools, school A and school B. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows information about the favorite subjects of students from two middle schools, school A and school B. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates data about the dearest subjects of
pupils
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 from
school
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 A and
school
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B
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.In short,It is seen that both
school
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's
students
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 like extra-curricular disciplines to read more than others. In detail,
school
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 A student's most-liked subject is sport,which is red by 36
pupils
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.
While
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 25
students
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 from
school
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B
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 love to studt craft subject.
This
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 number is the highest in
school
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B
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.The second most favourite subject from
school
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 A is science,9
pupils
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 are keen to read it.
On the other hand
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,18
students
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 from
school
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B
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 read language subjects the most after drawing.Social science stands in third place,6 and 10
pupils
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 like to study it at
school
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 A and
school
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B
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 respectively.
However
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,five
students
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 from
school
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 A best-loved discipline is language.Meanwhile,sports in
school
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B
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 are liked by the same number of
pupils
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. The least loved subjects of
students
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 in both schools are science and craft.In
school
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 A only 4
pupils
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 like to study crafts.
While
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 only 2
students
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 want to read sports in
school
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B
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pupils, school, b, students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • comparative data
  • favorite subjects
  • middle schools
  • horizontal axis
  • vertical axis
  • quantifies
  • preference
  • initial observation
  • significantly greater interest
  • shared enthusiasm
  • favored
  • attracts more students
  • draws the highest number
  • popularity
  • outliers
  • subject preferences
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