Most people are not interested in how their food has been produced. They only care about how much it costs. To what extent to you agree or disagree?
In order
to choose
Change the verb form
choosing
food
, i
strongly agree Change the capitalization
I
about
that statement. The Change preposition
with
price
tag of the product give
more impact for some Verb problem
has
people
. People
who have middle to low economical
stage still count and Correct word choice
economic
give
more attention Verb problem
pay
about
how Change preposition
to
his
own Correct pronoun usage
their
money's
Change noun form
money
flow
.
In my opinion, Correct subject-verb agreement
flows
almost of
Rephrase
most
people
in basic are
often pick Unnecessary verb
apply
a
things Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
who
have Correct pronoun usage
that
minimise
Replace the word
minimal
price
and have been compared with the maximize
quality. Replace the word
maximum
However
, we just know that we did not find the things like that. Several people
believe when they finding
the cheaper one, they can Wrong verb form
find
be succeed
Change the verb form
succeed
to save
more Change preposition
in saving
money
and get
better in life.
How Wrong verb form
getting
people
spent
that Wrong verb form
spend
money
, it
depends Correct pronoun usage
apply
of
how Change preposition
on
people
divided
Wrong verb form
divide
they
cash flow. The other just give more portion of spent Correct pronoun usage
their
money
for hunting foods with no limited price
requirements despite that they can give little bit portion for any occassion
. And the other Correct your spelling
occasion
hands
they have a lot of cash flow percentage for Fix the agreement mistake
hand
spent
their Wrong verb form
spending
money
to
any Change preposition
on
occassion
Correct your spelling
occasion
nevertheless
so stingy for their own body especially for feeding. It
back to others preferable.
In my opinion, how their Add a verb
It is
It was
food
has been produced take
Correct subject-verb agreement
takes
impactfull
benefits Correct your spelling
impactful
especially
for own body health. Add the comma(s)
, especially
However
, the important to have known
is Wrong verb form
know
the
lower prices Correct your spelling
that
not
the only aspect to describe Add a missing verb
are not
about
Remove the preposition
apply
how
the quality of the products. So, Rephrase
apply
i
think it is fine when we choose the lowest Change the capitalization
I
price
for food
by providing of
Change preposition
apply
the
good enough Correct article usage
apply
of
quality. Because the most important is having Change preposition
apply
food
who
we like the most but cannot hit our wallets.Correct pronoun usage
that
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