People think that the best way to reduce crime is to give longer prison sentences. Others believe that there are other alternative solutions for reducing crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion on this topic
Other
people
are of the view that sentencing offenders to a long time in Use synonyms
prison
is the most viable solution to ameliorate Use synonyms
crime
Use synonyms
while
some believe that paying Linking Words
of
fines and providing counselling services could be considered as better solutions. Change preposition
apply
However
, I believe that making Linking Words
crime
doers to be reprimanded in Use synonyms
prison
is a noble idea.
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To begin
with, putting individuals who go against the law in Linking Words
prison
for a Use synonyms
while
is considered to be the panacea to Linking Words
crime
. Use synonyms
This
is because in most cases human beings learn more if they are put in a Linking Words
conjucive
environment. To Correct your spelling
conjugative
elaboate
Correct your spelling
elaborate
further
, taking Linking Words
murders
Replace the word
murderers
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for
example, subjecting them Add the comma(s)
, for
in
jail conditions will help them to understand that what they did was not correct. It will Change preposition
to
also
help in reducing Linking Words
further
Linking Words
crimes
mainly Use synonyms
due to
the fact that the offender will be in jail. I believe Linking Words
this
helps a lot in Linking Words
crime
reduction.
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On the other hand
, allowing offenders to pay exorbitant bail fines can Linking Words
also
assist in lessening the Linking Words
occurance
of Correct your spelling
occurrence
crimes
in societies. It is important to note that in some casesUse synonyms
,
if the person is made to pay large sums of money for Remove the comma
apply
crimes
they would have committed, it might help in Use synonyms
bring
awareness. To most Change the verb form
bringing
people
money is not easy to find, Use synonyms
hence
Linking Words
this
could Linking Words
also
make an impact in reducing Linking Words
crimes
. More importantly, providing Use synonyms
counseling
services to Change the spelling
counselling
Use synonyms
crime doers
can Add a hyphen
crime-doers
also
make a positive impact Linking Words
to
communities. Change preposition
on
However
, it should be noted that the mentioned methods can only work if the nature of the Linking Words
crime
committed is not serious Use synonyms
for example
killing Linking Words
of
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apply
people
, Use synonyms
robbing
banks to mention only a few.
In conclusion, giving offenders an opportunity to pay high Correct word choice
or robbing
amount
of bail fines and offering counselling services to them might help in dealing with Fix the agreement mistake
amounts
crime
issues. Use synonyms
However
, locking criminals in Linking Words
prison
for longer periods proves to be the most reliable way especially if we are to consider very serious offences Use synonyms
such
as killing of Linking Words
people
or armed robbery cases.Use synonyms
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