the map below describes changes to a park in 1980 and now.

the map below describes changes to a park in 1980 and now.
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The map gives information about the transformation of
park
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the park
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in 1980 and
present
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time. At a glance, it is noticeable that the only part of
park
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the park
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that
do
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not change is
a
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the
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pond, with the exception
for
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of
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otther
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other
facilities and plants. In terms of changes, the two gates in the initial year were removed on the one-way road turned into
intersection
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the intersection
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.
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on the
north east
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northeast
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, the
trees
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tree's
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location was developed
to
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into
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recreational
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a recreational
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place, which
was
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consisted of
tress
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trees
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; chairs; desks; and barbeque. Subsequent to that,
on
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in
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the south of that place, the flowers were replaced with
playground
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a playground
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.
Then
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, at the
left-handed
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left-hand
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side, there were
also
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flowers which suddenly turned into
bush
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bushes
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in
this
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period.
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, there was only a slight difference towards
pond
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ponds
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and
bench
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benches
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from 1980 to now.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • transformed
  • expanded
  • renovated
  • upgraded
  • revamped
  • refurbished
  • install
  • addition
  • increase
  • enhance
  • improve
  • introduce
  • upgrade
  • create
  • development
  • facilities
  • recreational areas
  • wildlife habitats
  • pathways
  • walkways
  • seating areas
  • lighting arrangements
  • ponds
  • lakes
  • sports facilities
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