the charts below show the internet use in different purposes in Australia in 2010,2011 and the percentage by users .

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The bar charts provide information about Australia's

internet

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usage for three different purposes in the years 2010 and 2011.

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, the

internet

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is mainly used for emailing rather than other purposes and it is used by all

age

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groups almost the same.

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, social networking showed a downward trend

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banking and bill payment fluctuation among the

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groups.

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internet

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usage in Australia accounted highest rate for mailing which is 100

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for other reasons online baking and bill payment encoundered just above 60 and almost the same for social networking usage.

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, the

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group 15-24 individuals mostly

used

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social media platform

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around 90%

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age

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above 65 older people only spends about 20%. Meanwhile, the

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internet

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for

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financial purposes younger people only used less than 40% but the

age

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group 25-34 was the highest among them almost 60%.

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email is used by almost 80% of every

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individuals.

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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 4 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

159 words

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the charts below show the internet use in different purposes in Australia in 2010,2011 and the percentage by users .

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