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Recycling is now an essential measure: it is time for everyone in society to become more responsible towards the environment. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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 period of globalization, many people consider recycling to be an important part, and every family member should be responsible for the global environment. In my opinion, I fully agree with
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 concept, and my opinion will be discussed in the following paragraphs with a suitable conclusion. Confirming my agreement with
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 statement, I firmly believe that everyone should not litter in nature. I'll give you an example, every discarded plastic is harmful to nature.
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, every plastic disappears every 300 years.
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, in the Pacific Ocean, some fish populations are dying out
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 discarded garbage. Explaining some other arguments in
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 statement, it is true that society should increase the number of waste recycling plants.
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, we get a clean and protected environment. In conclusion, everyone should contribute to the development of waste recycling. I believe that the above points convincingly confirm my point of view.
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Develop a more comprehensive introduction that includes a clear thesis statement responding directly to the question prompt. Provide a background statement that introduces the topic clearly.
coherence cohesion
Include a range of cohesive devices to manage paragraphing and transition smoothly between ideas. Utilize linking words effectively to connect sentences and paragraphs.
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Support your main points with detailed and relevant examples. Concrete examples, data, and research can strengthen an argument. In the essay, more specific illustrations should be utilized to support the statement given in the topic.
coherence cohesion
Try to create a conclusion that not only summarizes the key points discussed in the essay but also provides a final perspective on the topic, restating your thesis and demonstrating the overall significance of the argument.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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