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Solar energy is becoming more and more popular as a source of household energy in many countries around the world . Why is this? What are the advantages and disadcantages of solar energy.

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Nowadays, more and more families opt for solar
energy
 as a source of power in many countries around the globe. It has some main advantages like
indipendecy
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independency
independence
 from market electricity and it is
also
 environment friendly.
However
, it
also
 brings some disadvantages, especially for those who use it rarely. People are
becomming
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becoming
 more and more aware of new technologies for producing
rennovable
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renewable
 sources of
energy
: the most known and increasingly used is
the
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solar
energy
, obtained through particular
pannels
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panels
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 installed mostly on roofs or alternatively in wide gardens. These
pannels
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panels
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 capture
fotons
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photos
 from the
Sun light
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Sunlight
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 and transform it
in
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into
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 electricity.
This
 source of household
energy
 has many advantages,
for example
, one becomes
indipendent
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independent
 from
market's
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the market's
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energy
 and
consequently
 from high bills and
continuosly
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continuously
 increasing
price
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prices
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.
Moreover
, it is
also
 a very mature and good gesture for
environment
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the environment
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, reducing in
this
 way the emission of pollution, caused by
extraction
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the extraction
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 of
energy
 by other means, like
coals
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coal
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 and petrol.
On the other hand
, it could
also
 result in being very expensive for those families who use it rarely as the amount of money spent is not that low.
Therefore
, one should compare
carefuly
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carefully
pros
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the pros
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 and cons of
this
 choice. In conclusion, many persons opt for solar
pannels
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panels
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 as a source of electricity for their houses and businesses buildings.
This
 option offers an important
money saving
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 and is
proved
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proven
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 to be less harmful
for
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 our ecosystem.
However
,
this
 decision should be taken
according to
 its effective usage.
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