As technology advances, traveling to space is likely to become an option for holidaysmakers in the future. What do you think are the advantages and disadvantages of space tourism?

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These are the days of
technology
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innovation. For
holiday makers
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holidaymakers
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there is one more option generated to
travel
in
space
in the near future.
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essay will not only discuss the pros associated with
this
notion but
it's
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cons will
also
be highlighted. To commence, the
merits
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of
traveling
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travelling
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in
space
is a great idea. Individuals will come to know more about
space
and
also
helps
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crowd
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to visit a new place
out
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of
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the earth
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earth
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.
For instance
,
this
will help
childrens
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children
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to gain practical knowledge of
space
and science.
Secondly
, Humans can
travel
freely without any restrictions.
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this
space
travel
hepls
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helps
people to be
stress free
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of their work and
relaxed
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for
few
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months.
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, far away from emails, deadlines, meetings, etc. It would provide another level of relaxation.
On the other hand
, there
many
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disadvantages
also
to
travel
in
space
.
Firstly
,
space
travel
is too expensive. Nowadays,
traveling
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in
world
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is very costly,so here's the point of
space
and it is not everyone's cup of tea.
For example
, tickets for suborbital
space
with companies can cost hundreds of thousands of dollars and it is very difficult for
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.
Secondly
, there is a risk of coming back to the planet.
Space
traveling
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is riskier at the time of landing on the
earth
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and if any issues occur in
space craft
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spacecraft
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then
it can
led
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lead
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to death
also
. In my opinion,
space
travel
would be a great experience but it is very costly and
also
riskier for
humans
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life.
Therefore
,
traveling
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in
world
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the world
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is a better option
then
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than
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space
.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that you structure your essay clearly with distinct paragraphs for introduction, main points, and conclusion. Aim for a well-balanced argument by providing equal development for both advantages and disadvantages.
coherence cohesion
Introduce your topic effectively by paraphrasing the question and clearly stating what aspects you will discuss. End with a concise conclusion that summarizes your main points and presents your own opinion clearly.
coherence cohesion
Support your main points with specific examples or relevant details. Avoid generalizations and make sure your examples fully illustrate your point.
task achievement
Ensure you fully address all parts of the task. Space tourism should be analyzed from both its advantages and disadvantages with a clear personal response.
task achievement
Your ideas should be explained clearly and developed comprehensively. Work on the clarity of expression and avoid vague statements. Focus on the complexity of the ideas rather than just repeating them.
task achievement
Use specific examples to ground your arguments. They should be relevant and strengthen the discussion of advantages and disadvantages. Avoid using hypothetical examples that do not support your points effectively.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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