Young people are often influenced in their behaviours and situations by others in the same age. This is called “peer pressure”. Do the disadvantages of peer pressure outweigh the advantages?
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The response to the task is incomplete. The prompt asks for an evaluation of whether the disadvantages outweigh the advantages, but the essay only presents disadvantages. It is important to address both sides to fully respond to the task.
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