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The table below gives information about rail transport in for countries in 2007. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features abd make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information about rail transport in for countries in 2007. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features abd make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart shows data about the uses of railway transportation in four different countries
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during the year 2007. In general, it is
clearly
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to see
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from the table that the
figure
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 for
Japan
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 using
rail
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transport
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 was highest for most categories, whilst the
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 for America was
opposite
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. Looking at
rail
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transport
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 mean uses in
Japan
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 and
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USA
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 in more detail, it is evident that the number of individuals using
railway
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the railway
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 in
Japan
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 was 27
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millions
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,
while
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USA
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 was 0.3
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millions
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. Meanwhile, 1.980
kilometres
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 for each person who took
rail
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transport
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 in
Japan
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,
whereas
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 was much lower than in
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USA
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, 80
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.
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,
cargo
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 which was carried by Japanese
rail
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transport
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reach
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 about 23.01
billion
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tonnes
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,
while
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was
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 just 2.820
billion
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tonnes
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cargo
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 carried in
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USA
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. Turning to the remained trend, the number of people using
rail
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transport
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 in Italy
recorded
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 about 5.5
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millions
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million
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,
also
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 in
this
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 category, the
figure
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 for
UK
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the UK
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 was
little
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a little
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 higher than Italy, 5.9
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millions
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. The 780
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kilometres
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 which was taken
by
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per person in Italy, and the
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 for one UK resident
770
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kilometres
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.
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,
cargo
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 which was carried by
rail
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transport
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 system in Italy recorded about 21.9
billion
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tonnes
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, and there
was
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 22.2
billion
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tonnes
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cargo
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 carried in
UK
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the UK
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words figure, japan, rail, transport, usa, millions, kilometres, cargo, billion, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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