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The table below gives information about rail transport in for countries in 2007. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features abd make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information about rail transport in for countries in 2007. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features abd make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart shows data about the uses of railway transportation in four different countries
in
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during the year 2007. In general, it is
clearly
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to see
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from the table that the
figure
 for
Japan
 using
rail
transport
 was highest for most categories, whilst the
figure
 for America was
opposite
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. Looking at
rail
transport
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transport's
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 mean uses in
Japan
 and
USA
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the USA
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 in more detail, it is evident that the number of individuals using
railway
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 in
Japan
 was 27
millions
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million
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,
while
 the opposite
figure
 for
USA
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the USA
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 was 0.3
millions
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. Meanwhile, 1.980
kilometres
 for each person who took
rail
transport
 in
Japan
,
whereas
 the
figure
 was much lower than in
USA
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the USA
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, 80
kilometres
.
Moreover
,
cargo
 which was carried by Japanese
rail
transport
reach
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 about 23.01
billion
tonnes
,
while
 there
was
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 just 2.820
billion
tonnes
cargo
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 carried in
USA
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the USA
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. Turning to the remained trend, the number of people using
rail
transport
 in Italy
recorded
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 about 5.5
millions
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million
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,
also
 in
this
 category, the
figure
 for
UK
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the UK
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 was
little
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a little
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 higher than Italy, 5.9
millions
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million
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. The 780
of
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kilometres
 which was taken
by
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per person in Italy, and the
figure
 for one UK resident
770
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kilometres
.
Moreover
,
cargo
 which was carried by
rail
transport
 system in Italy recorded about 21.9
billion
tonnes
, and there
was
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were
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 22.2
billion
tonnes
cargo
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 carried in
UK
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the UK
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words figure, japan, rail, transport, usa, millions, kilometres, cargo, billion, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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