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Band 8.5

You are looking for a part-time job. Write a letter to an employment agency. In your letter: introduce yourself explain what sort of job you would like say what experience and skills you have

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to apply for a part-time job through your employment agency. My name is Ayush Shukla, and I am currently a college student pursuing postgraduate studies in business management. I am looking for a flexible part-time position that would allow me to balance my studies and work responsibilities effectively. I would prefer a customer service, retail, administrative, or hospitality-related role, as I enjoy interacting with people and working in a team environment. I am available to work during evenings, weekends, and holidays. In terms of experience, I have previously worked in customer service and hospitality roles, where I developed strong communication and problem-solving skills. I
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 have experience handling customers, managing cash transactions, and working under pressure during busy hours.
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, I am proficient in using computers, Microsoft Office applications, and various digital tools. I consider myself hardworking, punctual, and eager to learn new skills. I would appreciate it if you could consider my application and inform me about any suitable job opportunities available. I look forward to your response. Yours faithfully, Ayush Shukla

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task response
For task response: add one or two clear details about the job you want, like hours, place, or pay.
task response
For task response: you can give one short example from past work to make your skills more clear.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: your ideas are in a good order, but you can use a few more link words like also, so, and because.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: keep each paragraph on one main point, and make the last line a bit more direct.
task response
For task response: you answer all parts of the task clearly.
task response
For task response: the tone is polite and right for a letter to an agency.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: the letter has a clear start, middle, and end.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: each paragraph has one main idea, so it is easy to read.
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