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In the past, people lived in one place for a long time , but now they can live in many different places what are the reasons ? Is this positive or negative development ?

#people #place #time #places #development
In the digital era ,
people
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many
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sepharate
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separate
 accommodations , in comparison with , the fixed lifestyle in the past.
This
 essay
aim
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 to point out a
number
 of reasons attributed to
this
 tendency , before showing the merits
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outweigh
outweight
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outweigh
 the adverse impacts There is no denying that the propensity of changing areas to live would be attributed
for
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 a
number
 of reasons.
Firstly
, given the fact that the proliferation of job
oppotunities
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opportunities
development
 emerges as a main contributor to
this
 trend .It can
be explain
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 that
this
 has provided many new jobs in
variety
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 of fields , which
create
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creates
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 more chances for
people
 ,especially the youth to improve themselves to get a job.
For example
 , in
the
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mordern
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modern
day
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day,
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the
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technology
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technological
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development
 has become increasingly more and more prevalent which has created more IT jobs
such
 as IT support
team
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teams
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, IT
teacher
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teachers
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,
IT
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and IT
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editor
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editors
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 to serve the levels of
development
 era .
Secondly
, there is no doubt that the utilization of the
mean
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means
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 of transport which has enhanced the way
people
moving
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move
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 is one of the most glaring reasons . It can
be explain
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 that
the
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intelligent public transport
such
 as driverless
car
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cars
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,
plane
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planes
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,
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and boat
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boat
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boats
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 which can easily take us to
the
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our
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 destination more quickly and more
convenient
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conveniently
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 has improved the way
people
moving
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move
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 to
another regions
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another region
other regions
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 despite
of
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its
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their
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 vast distance.
Simutanously
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Simultaneously
, I am of the opinion that
this
 tendency would be a great
development
. In the economic aspect, the use of the
number
 of
high-qualified
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highly qualified
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worker
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workers
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 who migrate can benefit
for
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apply
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many developed countries
where
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that
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 are facing
up to
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the agencying population problem. Many developed nations would use them as a suitable measure to deal with the lack of position
recuitment
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recruitment
 in many companies where are
lack
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a lack
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 of workers .
For example
 , in Japan and Korea where have
occured
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occurred
 a
subtantial
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substantial
 decline in
popultion
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population
 count
need
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needs
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 more overseas worker sources to deal with the reduction in the
number
 of workers .
To conclude
 , I would
refirm
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reform
reaffirm
 that, the proliferation of job
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opportunities
oppotunities
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opportunities
development
 and the utilization of the
mean
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means
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 of transport
which
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contribute to
this
 trend and
this
also
 brings many merits to the economic aspect in many developed nations
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