IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 6.5

The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002

The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002
#information #consumer #items #five #countries
The table below shows
about
Change preposition
apply
show examples
spending variety of
equipments
Change the wording
equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
show examples
 by users in 5 different
countries
 in 2002
Overall
 in all
countries
Add a comma
countries,
show examples
 people consumed food|Tobacco|Drinks with
Correct article usage
a high
show examples
high
Correct article usage
a high
show examples
 percentage,
while
leisure|education
 was less. In Italy people spent the biggest amount
for
Change preposition
on
show examples
 drinks|food|
smoking
Correct word choice
and smoking
show examples
that
Correct pronoun usage
which
show examples
 was 16.36%.
Clothing|footwear
 was at 9.00%
that
Correct pronoun usage
which
show examples
 was
highest
Correct article usage
the highest
show examples
 in 5 all
countries
.
Leisure|Education
 was the lowest in Italy with 3.20%. In Spain food|drinks|tobacco were used with 18.80%.
However
,
Clothing|footwear
 and
leisure|education
 were less respectively 6.51% and 1.98% . In
sweden
Change the capitalization
Sweden
show examples
 food |drink|smoking was 15.77%
that
Correct pronoun usage
which
show examples
 was the lowest in all
countries
in addition
 to
clothing|
footwear
Correct word choice
and footwear
show examples
 was
also
 the lowest.
However
,
leisure|education
 was
avarge
Correct your spelling
average
 with 3.22%. In
Turkey
Add a comma
Turkey,
show examples
 people
spent
Wrong verb form
spend
show examples
high
Correct article usage
a high
show examples
 amount
for
Change preposition
on
show examples
 food|drinks|
tobacco
Correct word choice
and tobacco
show examples
 with 32.14%. In
Sweden
Add a comma
Sweden,
show examples
 it was consumed with 28.91%.
However
,
clothing|footwear
werw
Correct your spelling
were
 almost equal in both
countries
 with 6.43% and 6.63% Leisure| Education was
more
Correct quantifier usage
apply
show examples
used twice
in
Correct quantifier usage
much in
show examples
 Turkey than
Sweden
Change preposition
in Sweden
show examples
. They were 2.21% and 4.35%.
Submitted by 1anticlon12 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, leisure|education, clothing|footwear with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
▼

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.
Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!
Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumer spending
  • items
  • countries
  • comparison
  • overview
  • table
  • data
  • information
  • proportion
  • percentage
  • figures
  • categories
  • expenditure
  • purchases
  • spending habits
  • trends
  • average
  • highest
  • lowest
  • variation
  • pattern
What to do next:
Look at other essays: