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The maps below show the changes in town

The maps below show the changes in town
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The two maps of the
centre
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 of the towns of Islip give information about the
city
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 currently and in the future.
Overall
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, a lot of modifications can be observed during the forecast development. First of all,
according to
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 the current
map
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map,
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 the
centre
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 is close to
a
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the
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 countryside. A main road deserves houses, a school, several shops and a park. Looking more closely at the map predicting the future development of the
city
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, a lot of modifications can be observed. The size of the
centre
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 will increase
in
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to
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 an oval shape;
therefore
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, the countryside will disappear.
Moreover
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, the single road will be replaced by a bigger
dual carriageway
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. A pedestrian way will deserve the central area. New houses will be built with new facilities
such
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 as a bus station and
a
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parking. The shops will be grouped
a
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in a
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shopping mall. The next point is the garden area which will be smaller the
city
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 will have more people
the
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and the
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 school will be bigger.
To sum up
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, between the actual map of Islip town
centre
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 and the future planned development, a
tot
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lot
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 of modifications is predicted. On the one hand the
city
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, be bigger with more facilities.
On the other hand
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, the park will be reduced, and the countryside will disappear. The
city
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 will have changed a great deal.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words centre, city with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 4 times.
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