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The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph provided information about
copper
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,
nickel
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 and
zinc
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 price changes per month during a
year
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. In brief,
Nickel
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 had the most change in 2014 with ups and downs and in order
Zinc
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 and
Copper
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 with a smooth change but almost similar prices between January and the
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 month of the
year
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. Looking at the graph closely, it is significant to note that
Nickel
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 had a huge decrease in price during 2014 but mostly in the first 3 months of the
year
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although
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 it was not the only peak
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it
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,
Nickel
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 had its lowest price in June
however
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, by the end of the
year
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 it had fixed income.
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, we have
Copper
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 and
Zinc
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 to take a look at, which both had
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 start in January with 2% and 1% in order, even though they had little changes they are different in details.
Zinc
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 started the
year
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 with an increase in its costs but it picked -1% twice in a
year
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, one in June and the other in October.
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Copper
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had drops in their prices by the end of the first 4th months and smoothly established themselves to reach 1.5% in December which is almost close to
zinc
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 with 2%. Tu sum up, Nickle had the most changes and
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off in their costs starting at 6% in January but ending with 1% unlike, the other 2 metals which passed 12 months without a huge difference from the way they started the
year
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Vocabulary: Replace the words copper, nickel, zinc, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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