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The diagrams below show the life cycle of a lady bird and its anatomy.

The diagrams below show the life cycle of a lady bird and its anatomy.
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The diagram illustrates the anatomy of a ladybird and how its life is going through various stages.
Overall
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, the structure of the ladybug consists of 8 important organs,
while
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a
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the
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 cycle of her life has
for
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four
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 main parts.
Firstly
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, the lifecycle starts with the egg
stage
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, which continues within 2-5 days, it flows to another point of life, which is the
stage
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 of larval.
This
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stage
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is going
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lasts
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 about 3 weeks, and
then
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 the ladybird develops into the pupa
stage
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,
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apply
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while
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 growing a leaf. The following and the
last
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 phase is becoming the adult creature.
Secondly
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, the structure of an adult ladybug has four main organs on the top, which is a head and the other three placed on both sides,
such
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 as
antenna
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the antenna
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, eye and pronotum.
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, the middle part consists of the red
elytras
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elytra
, which are located over wings, and
also
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, four legs.
In addition
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, the internal part is body, called the abdomen.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words stage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • metamorphosis
  • pupal stage
  • larva
  • elytra (wing covers)
  • anatomy
  • compound eyes
  • antennae
  • egg stage
  • adult ladybird
  • hatch
  • voracious eaters
  • shedding skin
  • infested
  • habitat
  • protective features
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