IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 4.5

The graph below shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

The graph below shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
#modes #transport #travel #work #european #city #report #university #lecturer #information
The provided data presents the compared mode of
transport
use
Change the form of the verb
used
show examples
 to
travel
 to and from
work
 in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000. The
first,
using
bus
Add an article
the bus
a bus
show examples
 as
modes
Fix the agreement mistake
mode
show examples
 of
transport
by
Change preposition
for
show examples
travel
 to and from
work
is
Unnecessary verb
apply
show examples
a
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
fluctuated, in 1960 at 20%, 1980 at 25% and 2000s
15
Change preposition
at 15
show examples
%. The
second,
using
car
Add an article
the car
a car
show examples
 as
Correct article usage
a modes
show examples
modes
Fix the agreement mistake
mode
show examples
 of
transport
 by
travel
 to and from
work
is
Unnecessary verb
apply
show examples
a
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
increased
go up
Verb problem
apply
show examples
in 1960
at
Change preposition
to
show examples
 5%,
1980
Change preposition
in 1980
show examples
at
Change preposition
to
show examples
 25% and 2000s
35
Change preposition
at 35
show examples
%. In
1960s
Change the article
the 1960s
show examples
, 1980s, and 2000s
using
Wrong verb form
the use of
show examples
bike
Fix the agreement mistake
bikes
show examples
 as
Correct article usage
a modes
show examples
modes
Fix the agreement mistake
mode
show examples
 of
transport
 by
travel
 to and from
work
is
Unnecessary verb
apply
show examples
a
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
decreased a drop at 25 to 5 %,
same
Correct article usage
the same
show examples
 with
bike
Fix the agreement mistake
bikes
show examples
, the
using
Wrong verb form
use of
show examples
 foot as
Correct article usage
a
show examples
Fix the agreement mistake
mode
show examples
modes
 of
transport
by
Change preposition
apply
show examples
travel
 to and from
work
is
Wrong verb form
was
show examples
 a decreased a drop at 35 to 5 %.
However
, we can see using a car
for
Change preposition
as
show examples
mode
Correct article usage
a mode
show examples
transportation
Change preposition
of transportation
show examples
 which
use
Verb problem
apply
show examples
people
as
Change preposition
apply
show examples
transport
 by
travel
 to and from
works
Fix the agreement mistake
work
show examples
 in Europe city, expect bike and foot
as
Correct your spelling
a
show examples
 downward trend
to used
Verb problem
apply
show examples
as mode
transport
 in Europe city.
Submitted by wiwinwindiahadi on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
▼
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
▼
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
▼
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words transport, travel, work, modes with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: