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The crime rate nowadays is decreasing compared to past due to advance technology which can prevent and solve crime. Do you agree or disagree.

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thoughts
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 that the crime rate is reducing nowadays as compared to
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past
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 just because of
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advance
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technology
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 which can not only act as
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preventer
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 but
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also
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the
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pending cases. As my
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 is concerned,
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 totally disagree with
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 notion. To start with , numerous factors can be noticed
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 how AI give birth to new illegal
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. Tendency of criminal
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 or criminal minds has increased after the revolution in the field of
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,
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 as the root cause. As ,in modern
society
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 most of the crimes are committed by individuals with mental efforts rather than physical efforts.
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, a recent survey conducted in U.K revealed that around 67% of the illegal
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 were committed by
those
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individuals who were
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experts
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expert
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experts
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 in the field of
technology
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 , advancement
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also
put
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contribution
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 the crime rate . Moving forward,
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 the introduction of
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CCTV
 cameras was based on security purposes
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now criminals use
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this facility
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 to target
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victims. To
clear more
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, around 43%
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case
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heard
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 by people on
regular
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 basis related to misuse of the hidden camera like shoot out of inappropriate videos of women and girls which spoil their whole
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career
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.
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 of
this
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, social media, the
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popular
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 mode of
technology
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,sometimes
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 false information
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 the public which leads to conflicts or disputes between people .
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 , the cases of cyber crime like hackers can easily hack any system,
account
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or account
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 within a minute just by using tricks ,
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also
 increased
upto
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up to
 55 %
than
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 gone days . In fact , after the introduction of AI , it becomes easier for
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criminals to
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 the personal data of anyone which leads to
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 loss.
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,
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technology
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 has made
humans
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 life more easier and convenient
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on the other hand
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 in the case of criminal
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, it proved as the root cause of many illegal
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.

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task achievement
The essay addresses the topic, but the argument is not fully developed. To improve task achievement, ensure to provide a balanced perspective and explore both sides of the argument thoroughly. Additionally, aim for a more complete response by clearly outlining your position throughout the essay as well as in the conclusion.
coherence cohesion
The essay lacks a coherent logical structure. Ideas should flow naturally from one to the next. Utilize cohesive devices effectively to create a seamless connection between points. Aim to have a clear introduction, body paragraphs with topic sentences, and a conclusion that summarizes your main points.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • surveillance cameras
  • advanced security systems
  • potential criminals
  • law enforcement
  • AI (artificial intelligence)
  • big data analytics
  • forensic science
  • public awareness
  • social media
  • online platforms
  • crime prevention
  • crime rates
  • counterargument
  • cybercrime
  • technological misconduct
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