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The crime rate nowadays is decreasing compared to past due to advance technology which can prevent and solve crime. Do you agree or disagree.

#crime #rate #advance #technology
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thoughts
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who
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 that the crime rate is reducing nowadays as compared to
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the past
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past
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 just because of
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advance
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technology
 which can not only act as
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preventer
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 but
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also
 resolve
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the
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pending cases. As my
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 is concerned,
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 totally disagree with
above
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 notion. To start with , numerous factors can be noticed
that
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 how AI give birth to new illegal
activities
. Tendency of criminal
activities
 or criminal minds has increased after the revolution in the field of
technology
,
consider
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 as the root cause. As ,in modern
society
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 most of the crimes are committed by individuals with mental efforts rather than physical efforts.
For instance
, a recent survey conducted in U.K revealed that around 67% of the illegal
activities
 were committed by
those
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individuals who were
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experts
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expert
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 in the field of
technology
.
Hence
 , advancement
aslo
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also
put
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contribution
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 to
raise
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 the crime rate . Moving forward,
although
 the introduction of
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CCTV
 cameras was based on security purposes
but
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now criminals use
this facility
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 to target
the
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victims. To
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, around 43%
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case
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heard
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 by people on
regular
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 basis related to misuse of the hidden camera like shoot out of inappropriate videos of women and girls which spoil their whole
life
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 or
career
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.
Instead
 of
this
, social media, the
poplar
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 mode of
technology
,sometimes
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 false information
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 the public which leads to conflicts or disputes between people .
In addition
 , the cases of cyber crime like hackers can easily hack any system,
account
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or account
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 within a minute just by using tricks ,
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also
 increased
upto
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up to
 55 %
than
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 gone days . In fact , after the introduction of AI , it becomes easier for
the
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criminals to
stole
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 the personal data of anyone which leads to
major
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 loss.
To conclude
,
although
technology
 has made
humans
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 life more easier and convenient
but
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on the other hand
 in the case of criminal
activities
, it proved as the root cause of many illegal
activities
.
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