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The chart below shows the number of travellers using three major airports in New York City between 1995 and 2000.

The chart below shows the number of travellers using three major airports in New York City between 1995 and 2000.
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The bar chart illustrates information about the amount of visitors in three airports in New York in
five
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year
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period
. The size of
people
 is measured in millions per year.
Overall
, as it can be seen the number of
people
 in Newark and LaGuardia had a substantial growth during the
period
 given.
However
, the volume of passengers in John F. Kennedy fluctuated. In detail, LaGuardia had the highest amount of passengers in the
period
 and started from about 35
million
people
 in 1995 and reached a peak in 2000 of 69
million
,
repectively
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respectively
. The same
tednency
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tendency
 can be found in Newark, which
was
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began from 15
million
 in 1995,
then
 it
is
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almost doubled in 1997 with a slight rise
for
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of
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 2
million
people
in
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at
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 the end of
period
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the period
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. The
amount
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number
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 of visitors
in
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to
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 John F. Kennedy fluctuated significantly and started from 25
million
 in 1995,
then
it
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reached a peak in 1997 of about 48
million
.
Than
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 it fell to 31
million
 in 1999 with a jump in 2000 for about 10
million
 visitors.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words period, people, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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  • significant increase
  • highest number
  • steady increase
  • largest growth
  • dramatic
  • slowest growth
  • slight decrease
  • gradual increase
  • period
  • travelers
  • major airports
  • followed by
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