Every year thousands of students go overseas to study. Although many benfit from the exeprience, other go home disaappointed. What are the benefits and drawback of studing in another country
The discussion of studying abroad is surely one that begs the question of exactly how it could yield
outcome
. Conspicuously, Fix the agreement mistake
outcomes
this
idea is fruitful when considering time
management with independent
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the independent
student
acquires; nonetheless
, the cons of such
is ostensible as it impacts both family's
economic situation and relationship.
Circling back to Correct article usage
the family's
it's
pros, the contribution it makes to valuing Replace the word
its
time
is unmistaken able
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unmistakable
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with, Since student
are on
their own shoes, graduating in Change preposition
in
foreign
country predominately demands catering with apropos daily routine. Take Correct article usage
a foreign
for instance
, there would be
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time
, hygienic maintenance and many more. Furthermore
, one paves the way for doing everything on their own to feel satiated. This
point resembles similar when foreign students works
in miscellaneous stores to meet their monthly budget. Change the verb form
work
Therefore
, based on these reasons, it bolstered the fact that foreign study could be
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self growth
and respecting Add a hyphen
self-growth
time
which overwhelmingly justifies the action as well.
Nevertheless
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its
impact
can be catastrophic is when the impact
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transpires
shrinking
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a shrinking
finance
structure. Replace the word
financial
This
could be well understood while
referring humungous loan parent takes for sending their kids to study as the tuition fee of such
organization
is out of family income, not to forget monthly expense . Correct article usage
an organization
For example
, the student
is seen to pay monthly for decades to end the loan tenure. Another dilemma is detrimental
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the detrimental
impact
on personal communication with family. This
resemble
when Change the verb form
resembles
student
get
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gets
few
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apply
time
off once a year to get together with
their families. Thus
, given such
influential
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an influential
impact
on family money and relationship
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relationships
this
are
ought to be more in the limelight.
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apply
To conclude
, both side
presents a paradox. Change to a plural noun
sides
However
, it's
benefit could be Replace the word
its
channelized
to understanding Verb problem
channelled
time
value along with
acquiring plausible
sense of carrying things alone, but let's not ignore Add an article
a plausible
it's
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impact
on money value and personal relations.Submitted by suresh.sssingh.singh984 on
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Task Achievement
Task Achievement: Your essay partially addresses the task, as the benefits and drawbacks of studying abroad are mentioned but not explored in depth. Aim to develop your ideas fully with clear, specific examples and substantiate your claims to provide a well-rounded discussion of the topic. Remember to address all parts of the question to show a complete understanding.
Coherence and Cohesion
Coherence and Cohesion: The structure of your essay needs improvement for better logical flow. Transition words and cohesive devices could be used more effectively to help the argument progress naturally. Aim to create paragraphs with clear main ideas, and use cohesive devices to link these ideas both within and between paragraphs.
Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic
IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.
Answer structure for the type of essay
- Introduction
- Body paragraph 1 – advantages
- Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
- Conclusion
Examples to start your body paragraph:
- The main advantage is...
- The disadvantage of this...
- The main benefit...
- Despite these advantages...
- One possible drawback...