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The internet when used as a source of information has more drawbacks than advantage. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The
internet
 when utilized as a source of
information
 has more disadvantages than benefits. Personally, I totally disagree with
this
 view and I will explain why in
this
 essay. Admittedly,there is a minor downside to sourcing
information
 online.
Firstly
, some teachers online give false
information
. Most ideas online are bogus
due to
 the fact that the
internet
 is easily accessible
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so anybody can easily post gibberish
thus
 leading to
buildup
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 of false
knowledge
 by people who do not have prior
knowledge
 about the researched topic.
However
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 despite the above basic disadvantage associated with making use of the
internet
 to get
information
 , I believe that it has a lot more advantages .Websites
saves
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 cost . The cheapest way to get ideas is through the
internet
 no matter the kind of
knowledge
 an individual is seeking.
Also
,
information
 can be gotten for free on the
internet
whereas
 if an individual
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 to go to school to get that same
knowledge
 a huge amount of money would have to be
payed
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. Another vital benefit is that a variety of answers to different questions about various fields of study can be
gotten
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 online. No matter the question being asked , just a click on the
internet
 can give just the answer one seeks.
For
example
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 the most used website to garner
information
 about a particular thing is Google reason being that it is not limited in its ability to supply answers to different questions . In conclusion despite the minor demerit associated with the use of the
internet
 to gather
information
 I believe it has brought a lot of benefits both in the area of cost management and it being versatile.
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