universites should accept equal number of male and female in every subject ? at what extent do you agree or disagree?

Yes,
i
Change the capitalization
I
show examples
accept it. I
wont
Correct your spelling
want
show examples
to
been
Wrong verb form
be
show examples
leatn
Correct your spelling
learn
english
Change the capitalization
English
show examples
specially
Replace the word
especially
show examples
in IELS. I'm still basic about IELTS, but I have a strong determination to get a high score, the reason is that I want to continue studying abroad. I need a lot of time to study again automatically, repeat and study the forms of questions in IELS, by joining write9, I will have very valuable experience and have a very good opportunity for a better future.
Submitted by awie07adan on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

coherence cohesion
Your essay lacks a clear structure, with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Consider organizing your thoughts into these distinct parts with clear transitions between them.
task achievement
The essay does not address the prompt about whether universities should accept an equal number of males and females in every subject. Make sure you directly respond to the question and provide relevant arguments and examples.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender equality
  • meritocracy
  • diversity
  • underrepresentation
  • quotas
  • academic discipline
  • learning environment
  • societal roles
  • STEM fields
  • initiatives
  • negative consequences
  • admissions
  • equal opportunities
What to do next:
Look at other essays: