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The graph below shows sales figures of 3 book genres from 2015 to 2021

The graph below shows sales figures of 3 book genres from 2015 to 2021
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The line graph illustrates the number of the three genres
off
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books
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 (
horror
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,
fantancy
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fantasy
, and
romance
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) sold over seven years between 2015 and 2021. Units are measured in millions of
books
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.
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, the sales figures sales of
horror
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 and
romance
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books
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 increased over the
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 given,
while
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 those
of
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 fantasy
books
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 dropped. At the beginning of the
period
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, fantasy was the most popular genre among the three, which was replaced by
horror
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 in 2018, and
eventually
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romance
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 became the
most read
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 genre from 2020 onwards. In terms of the amount of
horror
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books
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 consumed, it stood at slightly above 20
million
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 in the first year and
then
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 reached a peak
30
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million
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 four years later before witnessing a decrease to just over 25
million
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 in 2021.
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, almost 10
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romance
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books
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 were bought at the start of the
period
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 after which their consumption rose sharply until hitting a high of 30
million
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 in 2020 and
then
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 levelling off at more or less 29
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 in the final year.
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, in 2015, consumers purchased marginally under 30
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 fantasy
books
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 and
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 figure, which experienced some fluctuations from 2015-2018, fell dramatically to about 10
million
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 by the end
period
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books, horror, romance, period, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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