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The charts summarise the weight measurements of people living in Charlestown in 1955 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts summarise the weight measurements of people living in Charlestown in 1955 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The charts show data about the
weight
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 measurements of
inhabitants
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 living in Charlestown in 1955 and 2015.
Overall
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, in both
age
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 ranges of 20-29, the
inhabitants
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 of Charlestown in 1955 and 2015 had a high
percentage
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 of ideal
weight
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. A deep analysis of the bar charts provided reveals the
weight
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 of
inhabitants
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 of Charlestown in 2015 in the
age
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range
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 20-29 is ideal with about 70%.
In contrast
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, the
age
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range
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 60-69 shows a high proportion of
people
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 obese with about 60%. Meanwhile, the
percentage
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 of
people
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 obese increases following the
age
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range
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 from 20-29 to 60-69. It is noticeable that in 1955
inhabitants
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 of all ages have an ideal
weight
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 and the highest
also
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 is the
age
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range
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 20-29 with around 70%.
In addition
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, the
percentage
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 of underweight
people
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 was more than the
percentage
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 of underweight
inhabitants
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 in 2015.
Besides
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, the proportion of
people
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 overweight in 1955 was lower than in 2015.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words weight, inhabitants, age, percentage, range, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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